Thursday, November 17, 2011

Visitation Rites

(from the book Spirit, Rhythms, Words)




she had to have known I was watching her
every night alone
sitting right there under the moonlight
her beauty impeccable
always so calm
at ease within the night air
self assured
how could I help but to fall in love
on that night absolute silence
she must have felt my presence
because there is no such thing
screams of fear cannot be heard in quiet vicinities
she craved my debauchery
as I came up behind her
affirming our desire for each other
I claimed her as mine forever
she offered no resistance
I took her to what has become our special place
asphyxiating my determination
that my spirit may unite with her soul
her love reciprocated by the look of horror in her eyes
until that moment
I had yet to experience such totality
she’s resting comfortably now
the prettiest of them all so far
I will visit her often

Rory


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19 comments:

  1. Briana Rose LuceroNovember 18, 2011 at 5:44 AM

    Whoah nelly!!! Very chilling! If you haven't. Heard a song called Lullaby by Amos Lee you should oh yes you should! Excellent work and crazy perception through the eyes of a killer! Hugs dear Rory!

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  2. Just JeffNovember 18, 2011 at 7:56 AM

    Wow..Loooved this man

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  3. RoryNovember 18, 2011 at 1:43 PM

    Thanks Briana, glad you enjoyed! I will look for the song you suggested

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  4. RoryNovember 18, 2011 at 1:43 PM

    Thanks Jeff. Always great to hear from you.

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  5. FrankieNovember 18, 2011 at 3:40 PM

    A wonderful write Rory. The chilling phychopathic overtones just amazing. You told a great tale here and kept the reader glued to the write. Well done.

    Frankie Queen of OZ

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  6. RoryNovember 18, 2011 at 4:04 PM

    Thanks Frankie. The psychology within it all appealed to me artistically. Glad you enjoyed the piece.

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  7. MJNovember 18, 2011 at 8:24 PM

    An excellent portrayal of a dark journey taken through a serial killers eyes...an eerie tale indeed. thanks for the tag in a piece that kept me captivated from being to end. :)

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  8. ek ellisNovember 18, 2011 at 10:46 PM

    A tale from the dark side indeed, thrilling and chilling suspense and dark beauty love it...

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  9. RoryNovember 19, 2011 at 9:38 AM

    Thanks for your comment MJ. Sincerely appreciated.

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  10. RoryNovember 19, 2011 at 9:39 AM

    Wonderful comment EK. Thank you so much my friend.

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  11. FrankieNovember 19, 2011 at 4:02 PM

    Yes Rory and that one can put themselves into any position to write from is something I admire so much. Some poets disagree with me when I say a writer is akin to an actor insomuch as they can act any part in a poem. Well done.

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  12. RoryNovember 19, 2011 at 7:46 PM

    Thank you Frankie!...and I happen to agree with you :-)!

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  13. Jessica BrookeNovember 19, 2011 at 8:32 PM

    Rory I don't want to repeat anyone but what comes to mind for me is also ..chilling! WOW! freaky! I like how you put yourself in the character's shoes here and you did it very well.

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  14. RoryNovember 19, 2011 at 9:59 PM

    Thanks Jessica. It was an enjoyable exercise. Glad to see you.

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  15. Stephany BordersNovember 20, 2011 at 8:23 AM

    Rory..
    this is chilling to my core. you have depicted this with disturbing clarity. I need to go read a fairy tale now. Excellent work.
    Steph

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  16. RoryNovember 20, 2011 at 9:39 AM

    Thanks Stephany. One of my darker undertakings. Appreciate the compliment.

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  17. randahm01November 23, 2011 at 11:08 PM

    Chilling, yet warm....:-)

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  18. RoryNovember 26, 2011 at 10:57 PM

    Thanks for stopping by Randa :-)!

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  19. My scribbles- By Crissy~April 24, 2012 at 12:21 AM

    Enjoyed thoroughly Rory wow a very intense read.

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